Saturday, August 6, 2011

How can I improve this poem?

Each must follow his instinctive path along values. Aristocrats or peasants. When someone is not acting accordingly, it does not matter if he is the one or the other, he is out of line and abuses of people. There is no excuse over that. Plus many appear as unjustly treated, every day they lament, but behind their throe is an intense case of vulgarity and laziness over anything that requires fatigue. Sorry, too few of lines in your poem to categorize behaviors. Snobs (which we are not) never hurt anyone. But vulgar people that curse us everyday, one way or another, are a nuisance for any community. Please, write something more balanced and philosophical, please... (plus : My answer is THE BEST so far. I do not care for the 5, but someday, the "aristocracy" of intelligent thinking should win.) Whoever picks on my beloved ones (you are in my beloved ones too) will have to confront justness.

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